Task 1 The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

Task 1

The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. 

Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
The illustration depicts the manufacturing steps of carbonated
bevarages
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beverages
.
However
, at the beginning of stage one, raw
water
from random sources
are
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collected and filtered and
then
the
water
reaches
to
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a compartment filled with
water
softeners and chemicals. The
water
gets treated and
then
gets pumped to the electric heaters to initiate the second stage where the
water
heating process begins to kill a wide range of microorganisms.
Then
, through a cooling pipe,
water
enters
to
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a compartment after evaporation where carbon dioxide is added
with
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water
in order to make it carbonated. Moving on, the third stage, which is mixing takes place
where
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the carbonated
water
enters
into
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a mixing tank, gets combined with colouring agents, syrups and different flavours and the components are
then
mixed vigorously.
Then
, the final filtration is done
in
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the beginning of the second
last
step and
then
bottles made of different materials or aluminium cans get filled with the final product coming after mixing.
Finally
, the beverage cans and bottles get packed and they become ready to quench the thirst of the customers.
Overall
, there are five stages for the production of soft drinks which
starts
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by
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cleaning the
water
and
ended
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by
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the distribution of cans and bottles in the supermarkets maintaining a particular chain.
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