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The first bar graph shows what percentage of four different groups completed a certain psychological task.The second pie chart shows what percentge of all the people who completed the task and finished it in less than one hour came from which group.

The first bar graph shows what percentage of four different groups completed a certain psychological task.The second pie chart shows what percentge of all the people who completed the task and finished it in less than one hour came from which group.
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There are two figures that display the
percentage
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 of each student
group
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.
Firstly
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,the bar
chart
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 illustrates the
percentage
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 of students in four different groups who completed the psychological work and the pie
chart
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 presents the proportion of students in each
group
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 that are able to complete it within an hour.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the Foxes
group
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 in both charts.
According to
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 the bar
chart
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,
People
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 in the Brewers
group
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 finished the task the most,which was over three-quarters.Followed by Truffles and Hawks
group
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 with figures of 60% and 50% respectively.
While
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Foxes
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the Foxes
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group
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of
people
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,which was responsible for under 20%. Moving on to the pie
chart
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,Nearly half of
students
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the students
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 successfully accomplished the task in less than an hour came from the Truffles
group
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 ,resulting in it having the highest proportion of
people
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.
While
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 Brewers and Hawks had nearly the same proportion,occupying 23% and 20% respectively.
Lastly
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,only a small minority of
people
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 came from the Foxes
group
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, group, chart, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar graph
  • Pie chart
  • Percentage
  • Completed the task
  • Task completion
  • Groups
  • Comparative analysis
  • Trends
  • Significant differences
  • Contributing factors
  • Time efficiency
  • Correlation
  • Disparity
  • Visual data representation
  • Patterns
  • Insights
  • Summarize
  • Group efficiency
  • Performance analysis
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