The table below shows the results of an airline survey in 2002 of economy class business travelers.The number indictes how many male of female passengers in each age group rated a particular feature as their most important in-flight consideration.

The table below shows the results of an airline survey in 2002 of economy class business travelers.The number indictes how many male of female passengers in each age group rated a particular feature as their most important in-flight consideration.
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The table illustrates the number of people in different age
groups
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who are above or below 45 years old and
also
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are categorized into male or female value in-flight
features
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as their top priority concern.
Overall
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,it can be seen that the majority of people regardless of gender or age rate
seat
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/
legroom
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as their most important except the younger female
group
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votes for attendant/service.
To begin
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with,three out of four
features
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which are
seat
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/
legroom
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,meals/drinks and attendant/service have nearly equal selection from all
groups
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.
That is
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to say,the younger female
group
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selects attendant/service the most which just over a third.Followed closely by
seat
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/
legroom
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and meals/drinks accounting for 30% and 26% respectively.
Also
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,the older female
group
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chooses both of these three
features
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at approximately over 30% each.The male
groups
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value
seat
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/
legroom
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more than female
groups
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which are just under 40% in the younger
group
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and nearly half in the older
group
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.The other
features
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these male passengers rate nearly a fourth in both
groups
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.
However
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,movies/In-flight entertainment has a minority of passengers choose.The younger ones regardless of gender tend to prefer more which is 10% in females and 10% in males.
Lastly
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,the older
group
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has the least consideration occupying 4% each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, features, seat, legroom, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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