People will never be willing to make the dramatic lifestyle changes needed to control climate change .For this reasons ,governments must force people to do so.To what extent do you agree or disagree.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Human activities directly affect the
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surroundings. It is considered that
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will not be ready to adapt to
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immediate
shifts in their day-to-day life to improve
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, so
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should
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and make strict laws to
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with the above given scenario and some reasons explaining my viewpoint will be discussed below. First of all , using vehicles
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realise
harmful gases in the environment which can be reduced by the reducing
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automobiles. Most
of
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people
use
private vehicles
instead
of public transport
due to
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.
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should make the strict for using public
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and strict fines should be introduced
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for using
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private vehicles without
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valid
reason.
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to travel everywhere
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in the downtown area which
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a lot of traffic and when
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automobiles are stuck in traffic they make more pollution.
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work.
Secondly
, plastic
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in the environment
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should put
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on
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plastic
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instead
recyclable
goods
should only be used. Recycled
goods
can be used again and they are decomposable as well.
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, in some countries, heavy
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penalties
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individuals
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of making and selling plastic
goods
.
Therefore
, huge landfills can be avoided by using recycled
goods
. Considering all the points above, pollution can be
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by
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increasing
the
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recyclable
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Language
Try to minimize spelling and grammatical inconsistencies for better clarity (e.g., "masses" to "people," "regime" to "government," "interfare" to "interfere," etc.).
Essay Structure
Provide a clear conclusion in your essay that reiterates your stance and summarizes your main points.
Support and Development
Include more elaborate examples or studies to strengthen your argument, especially regarding government measures in different countries.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the task by discussing the importance of government intervention in combating climate change.
Coherence and Cohesion
You present ideas in a logical order and discuss both pollution from vehicles and the issue of plastic waste.
Task Achievement
The essay includes relevant examples to support the points, such as penalizing the use of private cars and the banning of plastic goods.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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