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The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and all graduates who got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia and also show the average salary of both these types of grads, from 2004 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the percentage of math graduates and all graduates who got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia and also show the average salary of both these types of grads, from 2004 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportions of full-time
workers
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 who have a university degree from 2004 until 2012. The graph
also
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 compares between
math
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 and all other
graduates
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.
In addition
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, the average salary of all
graduates
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 is
also
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 presented in the same period of time.
Overall
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, the data showed a relatively stable curve of full-time employees with mathematics expertise.
In contrast
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, other
graduates
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 who continued the phase in their lives to be full-time
workers
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 were shown to be up and down.
In contrast
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, the amount of salary for all
graduates
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 rose significantly from 2004 until 2012.
First,
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in the
year
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 2004, there were 80% of
workers
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 who have
math
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 degrees. Surprisingly, from
year
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 to
year
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 until 2012, the
math
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workers
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' trend was almost stable without any significant decrease.
Whereas
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, the number of
workers
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 with various backgrounds and specialities from their
last
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 study in university showed a slight rise to 80% in 2008 and went down again to 60% in 2012.
On the other hand
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, the salaries of these
workers
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 always increase
year
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 to
year
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. Interestingly, in both years 2004 and 2006, the
math
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 worker's salary was equal to other
workers
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.
While
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, from 2008, 2019 until 2012, full-time
workers
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 with
math
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 backgrounds gained significantly higher salaries than others. approximately about five thousand dollars higher than other
workers
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, math, graduates, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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