Task 1 The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

Task 1

The diagram details the process by which carbonated drinks are produced. 

Summarise the information by selecting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The supplied process indicates how carbonated drinks are produced by several steps in factories.
Overall
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, there are five stages starting from cleaning
water
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and finishing with packaging drinks and delivering them to supermarkets. First of all, the raw
water
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is moved to the process in order to be filtered and softened with chemicals and
also
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be cleaned.
The next step is
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pumping the cleaned
water
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to electric heaters so as to heat it. Once the heated
water
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has been put
to
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the cooling pipe, the carbon dioxide is
then
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added to the container.
This
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stage is called heating evaporation and carbonation and the carbonated
water
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is created.
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this
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, the carbonated
water
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is transformed into the mixing tank with the help of a thin and long pipe. The following stage is
that
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when
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the carbonated
water
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is mixed with the flavour, syrup and colouring and
produced
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the mixed drink. After the carbonated
water
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has been mixed, it is
then
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filtered in order to be cleaned again. Afterwards, the mixed
water
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is poured into the bottles and cans in various sizes. The final step is packaging bottles and cans and delivering them to supermarkets with trucks so that drinks can be sold in the shops.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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