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The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent

The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent
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The graph illustrates physical
activities
 performed by Australian people of different age groups in 2019.
Overall
, both graph shows fluctuations in performing physical
activities
. The number of female participants surpasses male participants throughout the year. The
proportion
 of males (15-24
years
) shows the maximum physical exercise
that is
 more than 50%,
while
 the three female groups (35-64
years
),
also
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 percentages greater than 50%. The age
group
 of 35-44
years
 in
male
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males
show examples
 has the least interest in performing physical
activities
,
that is
 around 39%.
while
 the 65 and over
proportion
 of females shows, less interest in exercise,
that is
 between 45-50%. The major difference
of
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in
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activities
 noted between both genders is
of
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apply
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35-44 tears, where females
has
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have
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 more than 50% as compared to
male
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the male
show examples
group
, which is around 39%. 65 and over is the only age
group
 where the
proportion
 of both genders remains the same (45%).In
female
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the female
show examples
group
, the graph remained steady between 35
years
 to 64
years
 and shows
proportion
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a proportion
show examples
 higher than 50%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, proportion, years, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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