The bar chart below shows the percentage e of Australian women and men in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relavent
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The graph illustrates physical
activities
performed by Australian people of different age groups in 2019.
Overall
, both graph shows fluctuations in performing physical activities
. The number of female participants surpasses male participants throughout the year.
The proportion
of males (15-24 years
) shows the maximum physical exercise that is
more than 50%,while
the three female groups (35-64 years
), also
shows
percentages greater than 50%.
The age Correct subject-verb agreement
show
group
of 35-44 years
in male
has the least interest in performing physical Fix the agreement mistake
males
activities
, that is
around 39%.while
the 65 and over proportion
of females shows, less interest in exercise, that is
between 45-50%.
The major difference of
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in
activities
noted between both genders is of
35-44 tears, where females Change preposition
apply
has
more than 50% as compared to Change the verb form
have
male
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the male
group
, which is around 39%.
65 and over is the only age group
where the proportion
of both genders remains the same (45%).In female
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the female
group
, the graph remained steady between 35 years
to 64 years
and shows proportion
higher than 50%.Correct article usage
a proportion
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