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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graph delineates the trends in 
unemployment
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 rates across the
UK
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, continental 
Europe
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, and
Japan
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 from 1993 to 2007. In a general overview, both the
UK
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 and continental 
Europe
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 exhibited a decreasing trajectory in 
unemployment
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 rates throughout
this
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 timeframe,
whereas
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Japan
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's rates ascended until 2003,
subsequently
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 entering a phase of reduction.
Moreover
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, it is noteworthy that continental 
Europe
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 consistently recorded higher 
unemployment
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 figures compared to both the
UK
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 and
Japan
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. In the year 1993, the 
unemployment
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 rate in the
UK
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 was approximately 10%, marking it as the highest among the three areas examined.
This
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 figure experienced a significant decline, dropping to roughly 5% by 2001, stabilizing until 2005, and
then
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 experiencing a slight rise to 6% by 2007.
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, continental 
Europe
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 commenced at around 9% in 1993, reached a peak of 12% in 1997, and
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 experienced a gradual decrease to about 7% by 2007.
Japan
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,
conversely
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, recorded the lowest 
unemployment
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 rate in 1993 at approximately 2%.
Nonetheless
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,
this
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 rate demonstrated a steady increase, peaking at 5% in 2003 before descending to 4% by 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, uk, europe, japan with synonyms.
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