The rising levels of traffic congestion in many big cities around the world can cause the decline in the quality of life in cities. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Traffic
jams in big Use synonyms
cities
can have an imperative impact towards quality of life. Use synonyms
Although
it is easy to identify the root causes of that problem, some solutions can Linking Words
also
be offered to address it.
The first reason is a high tendency to Linking Words
use
private Use synonyms
vehicles
because of the high mobility Use synonyms
that is
needed, especially among workers in big Linking Words
cities
. I have seen Use synonyms
this
phenomenon in metropolitan Linking Words
cities
like Use synonyms
Jakarta
, Bandung, or Surabaya, where Use synonyms
people
must run errands immediately from one place to another. Obviously, using scheduled public Use synonyms
Use synonyms
transportations
is not the solution since they must wait for a long time, Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
therefore
Linking Words
people
decide to Use synonyms
use
private Use synonyms
vehicles
. Another one is the undeniable fact that public Use synonyms
Use synonyms
transportations
can cost a lot of money compared to when Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
people
take their own Use synonyms
vehicles
. Take, Use synonyms
for example
, in Surakarta, the cost Linking Words
for
using a public bus to go round-trip with 7 Change preposition
of
kilometres
distance is $1.50, which is almost doubled compared to when Correct your spelling
7-kilometre
people
Use synonyms
use
their own Use synonyms
motorcycle
. The Fix the agreement mistake
motorcycles
last
reason is Linking Words
due to
the low level of Linking Words
security
. In Use synonyms
Jakarta
, Use synonyms
for example
, women often receive sexual assault from irresponsible strangers Linking Words
or
negative Correct word choice
and
tragedy
like thief Fix the agreement mistake
tragedies
also
prevalently Linking Words
occurs
in subways, which Correct subject-verb agreement
occur
causing
Wrong verb form
causes
people
avoid to Use synonyms
take
public Wrong verb form
taking
Use synonyms
transportations
. Those aforementioned conditions increase Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
traffic
Use synonyms
congestion
, eventually, in my country.
Use synonyms
Accordingly
, there are some practical solutions that can be done to overcome the Linking Words
traffic
Use synonyms
congestion
issue. The first one is to impose a ‘public transportation day’ in some critical regions. Use synonyms
This
policy has been implemented by the ex-governor of Linking Words
Jakarta
, Mr. Basuki Tjahja Purnama, back Use synonyms
then
in 2019. He made Linking Words
Jakarta
Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
use
public Use synonyms
Use synonyms
transportations
on Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
the
Correct article usage
apply
even
dates, resulting in Correct your spelling
event
the
decreasing level of Correct article usage
a
traffic
mass Use synonyms
as well as
Linking Words
improvement
in air quality. Correct article usage
an improvement
Next,
subsidising public transport with public taxes to decrease the tariff, has Linking Words
also
been seen as an effective way to decrease the Linking Words
congestion
level, which has been practically done in some Use synonyms
cities
in Indonesia, including my hometown. Use synonyms
Last
, Linking Words
to
assign some Fix the infinitive
apply
security
personnel Use synonyms
in
each public Change preposition
to
Use synonyms
transportations
, in order to increase Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
security
levels; Use synonyms
thus
, it can Linking Words
alleviate
passengers from receiving or experiencing unwanted tragedies.
In conclusion, the primary cause of Verb problem
prevent
traffic
Use synonyms
congestion
is Use synonyms
because
Correct word choice
that
people
prefer to Use synonyms
use
their private Use synonyms
vehicles
Use synonyms
due to
several reasons Linking Words
such
as Linking Words
people
’s high mobility, high public Use synonyms
transportation’s
costs and Change noun form
transportation
low
Add a hyphen
low-security
security
levels Use synonyms
while
being public’s passengers. Linking Words
However
, it can be addressed by imposing special regulations to Linking Words
use
public Use synonyms
Use synonyms
transportations
for a day and a lower public Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
transport’s
fare, until assigning Change noun form
transport
security
officers to make Use synonyms
people
feel secure.Use synonyms
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