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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Your office building doesn't have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: ● Explain the problem ● Suggest a solution ● Say why parking will benefit all employees

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Dear Manager, I have a big
problem
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 and I think about
this
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problem
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 in my opinion you solving
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problem
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. I
do not
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cannot
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 find a
park
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 for my car because our office building does not have
a
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parking available.
this
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 is a big
problem
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. I do not use public transport because I have to be at
work
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 early. I must
be go
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go
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 to
work
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to
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in
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 my car. I usually spend time for parking 30 minutes. I do not
find
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have
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 a car
park
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 so I have to
park
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 far from the office and I run because If I do not run I am late.
This
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problem
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 occurs every morning so I
do
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am
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 not
motivate
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motivated
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work
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to work
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 because I come to
work
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 stressed in the morning. You want
to
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apply
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me to
productive
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be productive
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 but I
do
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am
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 not productive for
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 stress. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 there is empty land opposite our office but since
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 area is
common
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a common
the common
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 area, employees of other offices
park
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 their cars. If our takes a part of that area, employees will not have any problems with parking. Kind regards,

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using paragraphs to separate your explanation, suggestion, and reason for the benefit. Grouping related information together can improve readability.
Task Achievement
Try to clarify your solution proposal. You mentioned taking a part of the area, but the details on how this could be arranged would strengthen your point.
Task Achievement
Although the tone is quite personal, ensure formal language is maintained throughout for such letters.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively identifies the problem (lack of parking) and describes the personal impact.
Coherence and Cohesion
A friendly and respectful closing maintains good rapport with the recipient.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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