The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the natural process
bees
use to produce Use synonyms
honey
and the human-managed stages involved in extractingUse synonyms
,
processing, and packaging Remove the comma
apply
honey
for sale.
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Overall
, the natural process of Linking Words
honey
production by Use synonyms
bees
follows six stages, beginning with egg-laying in the Use synonyms
honeycomb
and ending with nectar storage in the hive. Use synonyms
In contrast
, human production starts with collecting Linking Words
honeycomb
and concludes with distribution and sale after processing.
In nature, the process begins when the queen bee lays eggs in the Use synonyms
honeycomb
. After a three-day larval stage, the eggs develop into worker Use synonyms
bees
. After three weeks, these worker Use synonyms
bees
leave the hive to collect nectar from flowers. Once gathered, the nectar is stored in the hive and gradually turns into Use synonyms
honey
through natural filtration processes. Use synonyms
This
cycle repeats continuously.
For human production, beekeepers collect Linking Words
honeycomb
from hives, after which machines are used to extract Use synonyms
honey
. Use synonyms
Next,
pasteurization is carried out to remove microorganisms and extend the Linking Words
honey
's shelf life. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
honey
is packaged in glass jars, ready for distribution and sale.Use synonyms
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