The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate the natural process
bees
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use to produce
honey
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and the human-managed stages involved in extracting
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processing, and packaging
honey
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for sale.
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, the natural process of
honey
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production by
bees
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follows six stages, beginning with egg-laying in the
honeycomb
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and ending with nectar storage in the hive.
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, human production starts with collecting
honeycomb
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and concludes with distribution and sale after processing. In nature, the process begins when the queen bee lays eggs in the
honeycomb
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. After a three-day larval stage, the eggs develop into worker
bees
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. After three weeks, these worker
bees
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leave the hive to collect nectar from flowers. Once gathered, the nectar is stored in the hive and gradually turns into
honey
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through natural filtration processes.
This
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cycle repeats continuously. For human production, beekeepers collect
honeycomb
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from hives, after which machines are used to extract
honey
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.
Next,
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pasteurization is carried out to remove microorganisms and extend the
honey
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's shelf life.
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, the
honey
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is packaged in glass jars, ready for distribution and sale.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bees, honey, honeycomb with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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