The diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the natural process
bees
use to produce honey
and the human-managed stages involved in extracting,
processing, and packaging Remove the comma
apply
honey
for sale.
Overall
, the natural process of honey
production by bees
follows six stages, beginning with egg-laying in the honeycomb
and ending with nectar storage in the hive. In contrast
, human production starts with collecting honeycomb
and concludes with distribution and sale after processing.
In nature, the process begins when the queen bee lays eggs in the honeycomb
. After a three-day larval stage, the eggs develop into worker bees
. After three weeks, these worker bees
leave the hive to collect nectar from flowers. Once gathered, the nectar is stored in the hive and gradually turns into honey
through natural filtration processes. This
cycle repeats continuously.
For human production, beekeepers collect honeycomb
from hives, after which machines are used to extract honey
. Next,
pasteurization is carried out to remove microorganisms and extend the honey
's shelf life. Finally
, the honey
is packaged in glass jars, ready for distribution and sale.Submitted by jisan.path1506605 on
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