The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.
This
line graph shows which way
of transportation ways
used in 1974-2002 in the UK.
Correct your spelling
was
Firstly
, Road
transportation is higher than others. Also
, water
Correct your spelling
waterway
way
and Rail
way
is same
rate in 1975.
Change the article
the same
Secondly
, Road
transportation method Add an article
the Road
is creasing
Wrong verb form
creased
little
bit in 1980 Correct article usage
a little
Although
, Pipline and Water transportations
are increasing, Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
Rail
way
is simillar
to Correct your spelling
similar
road
Correct article usage
the road
way
they Fix the agreement mistake
ways
creased
in 1980. Lines are around 20-80 million tonnes.
Thirtly, all lines look Verb problem
increased
same
rote in 1985. All of them Correct article usage
the same
so
Add a missing verb
are so
stabile
. on the top of the Correct your spelling
stable
list
Add a comma
list,
Road
Correct your spelling
Roadway
way
is still
same place, and Capitalize word
Way
Pipline
too. Rates are between 80-20 million Correct your spelling
Pipeline
tones
.
Correct your spelling
tonnes
However
, the graph is follow
Wrong verb form
follows
same
number on the graph. We can't notice any changes on the chart. Change the article
the same
Altough
, Correct your spelling
Although
Rail
way
is rise
down in 1990 - 1995.
Wrong verb form
rose
Finnaly
, the Correct your spelling
Finally
Road
line is around 80-100. Water
rate is over Correct article usage
The water
than
60 million tonnes, but Change preposition
apply
Rail
and Pipeline stabile in the chart.Submitted by turkogluahmetonur on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words way, road, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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