The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
line graph shows which
way
of transportation
ways
Correct your spelling
was
show examples
used in 1974-2002 in the UK.
Firstly
,
Road
transportation is higher than others.
Also
,
water
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waterway
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way
and
Rail
way
is
same
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the same
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rate in 1975.
Secondly
,
Road
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the Road
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transportation method
is creasing
Wrong verb form
creased
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little
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a little
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bit in 1980
Although
, Pipline and Water
transportations
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transportation
show examples
are increasing,
but
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apply
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Rail
way
is
simillar
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similar
to
road
Correct article usage
the road
show examples
way
Fix the agreement mistake
ways
show examples
they
creased
Verb problem
increased
show examples
in 1980. Lines are around 20-80 million tonnes. Thirtly, all lines look
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
rote in 1985. All of them
so
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are so
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stabile
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stable
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. on the top of the
list
Add a comma
list,
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Road
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Roadway
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way
Capitalize word
Way
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is still same place, and
Pipline
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Pipeline
too. Rates are between 80-20 million
tones
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tonnes
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.
However
, the graph
is follow
Wrong verb form
follows
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same
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the same
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number on the graph. We can't notice any changes on the chart.
Altough
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Although
,
Rail
way
is rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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down in 1990 - 1995.
Finnaly
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Finally
, the
Road
line is around 80-100.
Water
Correct article usage
The water
show examples
rate is over
than
Change preposition
apply
show examples
60 million tonnes, but
Rail
and Pipeline stabile in the chart.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words way, road, rail with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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