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The maps below show the centre of a small town called lslip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called lslip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures above illustrate two maps from the same location (slip
town
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 centre) in
peresent
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present
 and future plans for it, respectively.
To begin
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 with, slip at the time, is a basic
town
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 with a bunch of shops and housing sites.
In contrast
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,
this
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 place has a main
road
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 on the north half of the land with two lines of shopes aligned with it.
Also
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, there can be seen a
countrysideside
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countryside side
 on the very north part of the
town
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.
In addition
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, the
road
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 has 2 branches, which lead to the park (east
side
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) and the school (west
side
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). Houses are built in two sections in
south
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the south
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.
On the other hand
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, great improvement ideas can be seen in the second picture.
This
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 time, the
road
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 has become a dual carriageway that goes around the
town
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, with a short branch included for the new accommodation site.
Secondly
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, the old
road
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 is planned to change to a
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side walk
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sidewalk
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 for pedestrians.
Although
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,
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 the shops located in the countryside, have all been moved to a shopping centre and the rest of the land is used for a bus station, parking lot and new housing, the shops on the other
side
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 of the
road
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 are still the same.
To sum up
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, the park is planned to shrink in size to free up
a
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space for a new residential area.
Lastly
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, the school seem to remain identical.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • centre
  • small town
  • current state
  • development plans
  • maps
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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