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The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line diagram illustrates the proportions of film enjoyers in different
age
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 groups between 1990 and 2010 in the United Kingdom.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 who attended in cinema increased over the period of time with a fluctuation,
while
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 the
age
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group
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 44-54 was in the highest percentage and the 14-24
age
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group
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 individuals was in the lowest position. In 1990, around 37%
people
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 of 44-54
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group
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 went to movie theatres, and it rose to 40 per cent after 5 years;
although
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 decreased later 5 years and fell by approximately 37%,
however
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, it escalated dramatically reaching around 47% in 2005 and in 2010, when above 50%
people
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 went to cinema. There were similar patterns between the 14-24 and 34-44
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 groups
people
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, where the 14-24
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group
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 started from nearly 15%, after a fluctuation it finished above 20% and in 1990, 35% of citizens of 34-44
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group
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 would go for a movie, which was raised by around 9% in the year 2010.
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, before stabilising at 32 per cent in 2005, the 24-34
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group
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people
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 had a fluctuation before 15 years, who started at around 24 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • anomaly
  • trend
  • pattern
  • attendance
  • cinema-goers
  • audience
  • peak
  • decline
  • increment
  • fluctuation
  • baseline
  • societal changes
  • technological advancements
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • home entertainment
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