The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in China in four periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the difference between males and females in
further
education
in China whether they were studying full-time
education
or part-time
education
. From an
overall
perspective, it is clearly seen
both
genders prefer to study part-time
education
. Part-time
education
experienced an upward trend throughout the period.
While
full-time
education
showed a downward trend.
Both
male and female rates had some fluctuations. Commencing with the year 1970 , part-time showed a significant rise with men to 1000 thousand.
While
full-time rates increased sharply throughout the period .
Moreover
, in the middle years of 1980 increased by around 850 . Interestingly ,
both
men and women remained stable in
both
years at exactly 850. Part-time
education
for women increased sharply to 1050 higher compared to the number of the first year. Meanwhile, full-time for women was hitting a low - point in the year 1970 . Followed closely , just below 200 . Afterwards, it grew by roughly 250 .
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Further education
  • Full-time study
  • Part-time study
  • Trends
  • Participation
  • Distribution
  • Disparities
  • Proportions
  • Growth
  • Policy changes
  • Cultural shifts
  • Gender equity
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