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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
books
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the books
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 number which were borrowed in various four months in 2014 from different four village Iberaries. And the pie
chart
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 depicts the proportion of books that were borrowed over the given period.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of books that were borrowed in the line
chart
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provides
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shows
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 that Sutton wood had a significant Sort,
whereas
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 vest
decrease
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 gradually. In the pie
chart
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, fiction had the highest amount.
However
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, self-help was seen as the lowest. Observing the
chart
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 in more detail,there was a remarkable climb in Sutton Wood from about 250 to around 300.
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, Ryeslip plummeted remarkably from nearly 300 to roughly 170. looking into the pie
chart
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, Ryeslip was approximately 43% which is the highest percentage. But, history was the second with 14%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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