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The bar chart below shows the sector contribution to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contribution to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided bar graph demonstrates information about three various industries as a percentage share
to
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 gross domestic products in India between 1960
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and
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 2000.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the proportion contribution of
agriculture
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 exhibited a significant decrease
while
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 a reverse case was true for services, and that of industry rose mildly over 4 decades. It is
also
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 clear that dominance was held by
agriculture
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 at the beginning and by services
at the end
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 of the period, showing identical numbers. Starting with the
agriculture
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 sector, its trends led the pack until 1980 with 60%, 55% and 45%;
however
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, by 1990 and 2000, the percentage contribution of
agriculture
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 to GDP in India fell sharply to 30% and 15%, respectively, becoming the least contributor.
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, beginning at only 20% in 1960,
service
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the service
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 sector rose mildly until 1980 and overtook
agriculture
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, reaching 45% in 1990 and 60% in 2000 as a new leader in the chart. Turning to the figure that experienced a slight increase, showing approximately 15% in 1960,
industry’s
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the industry’s
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 ratio of India’s GDP witnessed 20% and 23% in 1970 and 1980, in turn, stabilizing until 2000 with the same percentage.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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