The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The
salmon
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fish has
small
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a small
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life
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cycle
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,
that
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and
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there are only three main features on it. Fry, smolt and adult
salmon
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are the parts of the
salmon
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life
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cycle
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.
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, every
part
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,
the
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salmon
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will have another size and look. When the
salmon
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is in the first
part
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of the
cycle
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, it
called
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fry, and it is the smallest and youngest
part
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of the
salmon
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life
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. A few years later, it turned into a smolt,
wich
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which
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the
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became when it
is
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between 12-15 cm tall. The
last
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part
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and the biggest called adult
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, and
in
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apply
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this
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time the
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will be 70-76 cm tall.
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, I would like to say that every
part
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of the
salmon
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life
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cycle
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has a different time, place and size and that
make
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this
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cycle
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easy and small, because it has only three parts.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, life, cycle, part with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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