The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The
salmon
fish has
small
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a small
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life
cycle
,
that
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and
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there are only three main features on it. Fry, smolt and adult
salmon
are the parts of the
salmon
life
cycle
.
However
, every
part
,
the
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of the
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salmon
will have another size and look. When the
salmon
is in the first
part
of the
cycle
, it
called
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fry, and it is the smallest and youngest
part
of the
salmon
life
. A few years later, it turned into a smolt,
wich
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which
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the
salmon
became when it
is
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was
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between 12-15 cm tall. The
last
part
and the biggest called adult
salmon
, and
in
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this
time the
salmon
will be 70-76 cm tall.
Finally
, I would like to say that every
part
of the
salmon
life
cycle
has a different time, place and size and that
make
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this
cycle
easy and small, because it has only three parts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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