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Som people believe that cooking is an important life skill, so schools should be teach all boys and girls how to cook , others people think that teaching all boys and girls to cook may be a waste of time.

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Some individuals believe that cooking is an essential life skill, and
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 , it should be taught at
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 both
boys
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 and girls in schools .
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essays
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 aims to examine both sides of the
rgument
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argument
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 surrounding
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 topic , in my mind cooking techniques should be included in
school
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 curricula. On the one hand, some argue that teaching cooking at
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 is unnecessary. The primary reason for
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 could be that
boys
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interest in cooking, as some perceive
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 a task primarily done by women. In many households ,
meal
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prepared
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 by women for family members , so men
addicted
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 and
boys
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also
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 see cooking as irrelevant to their lives.
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, some people believe
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school
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 only for things like computers , cars construction of buildings or electrical
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systems
. These practical skills may
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seenm
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seen
 more directly for
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 future.
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, teaching cooking at
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 various advantages. First and foremost by learning how to cook,students of both genders can develop independence especially when they graduate
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school
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after
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, go to
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high - Livel education ( universities or
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academics
academies
). Many college students rely on fast food which
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to
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humans life
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. Cooking classes could help them prepare healthier meals and make informed choices about their diet.
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 to
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, not only for teenagers but
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groups because statistics
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 many elderly people live alone without family members, so they should know cooking techniques
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countinue
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continue
 life forever. As an illustration,
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 notion has been proven by the recent research that was carried out by
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scientists
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 California State University . They found that European countries with cooking programs in schools help students build lifelong habits of preparing nutritious meals, after motivating them with some free deposits . In conclusion,
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of time
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but
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some
emphasis
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cooking
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that cooking
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are
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 more beneficial
bacuse
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because
 of
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its importance
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 . In my point of view , cooking should be more contribution to human beings well-being.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Good use of an example from research in the body of the essay to support the point about cooking being beneficial for health.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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