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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The line graph
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demonstrates
 the amount of
books
 borrowed in four specific village Iberaries in the year
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2014 starting from June till September.
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Additionally
, the pie chart
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illustrate
illustrates
 the
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proportion
corporation
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 of the
books
, that were
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selectively
 borrowed by type at the same period of
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time
that is
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chosen
 for the line graph.
It is clear that
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borrowing
books
 showed opposite directions during the four months of the study. The number of borrowing
books
 in West E dton and Church Mount moved up in
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parallel
 from 50
books
 in June to above 100 in July and
then
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continued
 to increase
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steadily
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till
time
 they
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 the peak in August. On
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 hand, the Ryesilo Iberaries
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exhibits
exhibited
 the most deiclin in the borrowing
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pattern
, which the borrowing figure
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sharply
 decrease from 300 in June to
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approximately
 160
books
 in September. It is
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obvious
 that the Fiction
books
 were the most popular
books
 among other
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classification
class fiction
books
 in 2014. The percentage
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remaining
 type of
books
 were relevently close to each other. The
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proportion
proportions
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proportion
vary
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 from 13% to 19%,
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whereas
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where
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