The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information about the amounts of guests in various London museums during summer vacations in 2013.The unit is measured in thousands of visitors.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the
last
month witnessed
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sharply
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increase in all museums.
In addition
,
British
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the British
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Museum
has the highest number of guests
thought
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throughout
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the vacation ,
whereas
Science
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the Science
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Museum
was
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has
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the lowest one.
According to
what is shown,
National
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the National
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History
Museum
and British
Museum
started from
closes
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figures in June.
While
the British climbed 150 thousand in July
then
dropped until reached 500 thousand. National History
Museum
decreased from 550 to 380
then
increased slightly to 390.
Finally
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both of them increased
in
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same
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the same
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amount. In terms of the red line,
firstly
achieved 400000.
Secondly
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it declined to 37000 visitors.
Thirdly
it continues
decreased
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to 300000.As all in
September
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September,
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it rose 150 thousand
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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