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You are a current student of Loren Brusque University, studying Business Administration. You want to apply for the post of Quality Assurance Manager you have recently seen on the university’s notice board.  Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and Give your reason for writing Tell about your education Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job.

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Dear Mr. Walker, I am writing to you to apply for
position
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 of Quality Assurance Manager that was listed on the notice board of
university
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the university
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. I am currently studying Business Administration as a full-time student in my third year at Loren Brusque
university
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. Two years back, I managed to grab a job, as an assistant
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Quality
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a Quality
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 Assurance Manager. Fortunately, got promoted
as
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 Manager
this
 year because of my good skills, knowledge and work. That means I have experience
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this
 job for more than 6 months. As said about the experience and abilities above, I think I am
good
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a good
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 fit for
this
 role.
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, I would be happy if you
can
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 consider me for
this
 offer.
Also
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 I can be contacted through email or
mobile
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 number provided above for any kind
query
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 or an interview.
Lastly
, I will be waiting to hear back from you. Regards Soojana
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph discusses a single idea clearly.
Task Achievement
Clarify the educational background more specifically related to the job requirements.
Task Achievement
The letter has a polite and respectful tone, suitable for professional correspondence.
Coherence & Cohesion
There is a clear logical progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing statements are appropriately professional and courteous.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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