The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. айша Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of people who smoked

cigarettes in the UK between 2011 and 2021. айша 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and

make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates data
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amount of individuals who smoked cigarettes in Britain during the
years
2011 to 2021.
Overall
,it is evident that men smoked more cigarettes per year than
woman
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women
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over 10
years
.
However
,in both
genders
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genders,
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the number of cigarettes smoked
was
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decreased throughout the period. From 2011 to 2015,men and
woman
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women
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was dramatically decrease
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was dramatically decreased
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.In 2011, the number of men who smoked was around 4
million
.Throughout the next 10
years
,the
amount
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of male smokers declined steadily,picking
around
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up around
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2
million
in 2021. Meanwhile,the number of
woman
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women
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smokers
also
plummeted in the next 10
years
.Starting at 3.5
million
in 2011 ,
then
this
fell to approximately 1
million
in 2021.
However
,by the end of the period ,the gap between the amount of male and female smokers had decreased considerably.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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