The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
The given pie chart represents the percentage of
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students
at
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institution in England who can speak
languages
other than
English
in 2000 and 2010.
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we can notice that there were various other
languages
that
students
know apart from
English
.
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Spanish was at majority among these
languages
.
also
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we can notice that in
later
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year
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years
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there
were
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less ratio of
undergrats
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undergrads
undergrad
who do not know other
languages
beside
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English
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english
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starting with 2000, as
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earlier Spanish was the most famous among
this
language
(30% ).Moving forward
percentage
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the percentage
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of
students
who know
german
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German
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and other
languages
were
same
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(10%).
Also
, the person
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was
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of
university
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the university
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participating
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participants
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who
knows
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know
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another
language
were (15%). Meanwhile,
one fourth
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of
students
cannot speak any other
language
beside
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English
. probing
further
in 2010, the amount of Spanish
speaker
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speakers
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increased to 35% .Surprisingly German, France and other
languages
speaker
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speakers
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became
same
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the same
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(10
percent
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per cent
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moving ahead) .The percentage of
another
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other
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language
speakers became 20 figure witnessed .
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