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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph demonstrates information about the
percent
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 of housekeeping owning and renting housing in England and Wales between 1950 and 2020. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be clearly seen that the rate of households in owned
accomodation
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accommodation
 decreased noticeably
in
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between
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 1950 and 2020 years.
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, there was a noticeable increase in the ratio of households in rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 in the given time period. When it comes to the
percent
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 of housekeeping in owned living quarters,
firstly
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, it fell from 69% to 30% in 1950 and 2000.
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,
the
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in the
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 next 20 years, it increased by 5% in the given time period. Turning to the rate of households in rented
accomodation
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accommodation
, in the first instance, it went up from 32% to 70 %;
however
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,
the
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in the
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 next 20 years, there was a decrease from 70% to 62% in
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 figure.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predominant
  • accommodation
  • trend
  • shift
  • households
  • homeownership
  • economic and social circumstances
  • interwar period
  • post-World War II
  • government policies
  • urbanization
  • public policy
  • economic prosperity
  • tipping point
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