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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part time Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph illustrates the number of males and females in
further
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 learning in the UK at 3 distinct times and if they were studying full time or partial.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the aggregate of part-time in both genders was more than the full-time students.
According to
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 the data presented on men, the topmost education was part-time in 1970/71 (1000),
whereas
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, the least was full-time in 1970/71 (nearly 100).
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, the part-time students in 1980/81 were almost as superior as in 1990/91, with approximately 850 compared to about 900 thousand .
Besides
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, the full-time education in 1980/81 was not quite as massive as in 1990/91, with roughly 200 against exceeding 200 thousand. Based on the information on women, the part-time pupils in 1970/71 were amazingly nowhere near as astronomical as in 1990/91,
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 full-time education in 1970/71 was not as immense as in 1990/91.
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, in 1980/81, the part-time pupils were formidably high (almost 800),
while
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, the part-time pupils were 200 thousand.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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