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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most’. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about explain how this book influenced you say whether this book would be likely to influence other people Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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 sharing about the
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 that influenced me a lot. Well, the name of the
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 is " The Secret" published in November 2006. It is written by Rhonda Byrne.
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 it is a self-help
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 based on some films made earlier.
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, it is based on the pseudoscientific law of attraction which states that humans have
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 to attract things to themselves by pondering what they want. Honestly,
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book
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 helped me in fighting with pessimistic feelings and made me more optimistic when I was really depressed and felt worthless during the
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 pandemic.
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, it persuaded me to believe in myself.
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, there is no doubt,
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 power to encourage numerous pupils to fight depression and achieve their respective goals using the knowledge, references and instances provided in the
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.
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Furthermore
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control
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 their goals and aspirations. I hope you find it convenient and impacting. Yours faithfully, Soojana
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coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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The writing tone is appropriate and respectful for a letter to an editor.
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