The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the percentage of women in senior management roles across three companies
Eldan
Ltd
, Bamforth
Ltd
, and Finsbury
Ltd
over a 40-year period from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
, there was a significant increase
in the proportion of female senior management positions in Eldan
Ltd
and Bamforth
Ltd
, while
the increase
was smaller in Finsbury
Ltd
. Eldan
Ltd
showed the most dramatic growth over the years.
In 1975, Eldan
Ltd
had the lowest participation of them, at just 3%, compared to Bamforth
Ltd
at 9% and Finsbury
Ltd
at 16%. This
percentage showed no significant change in 1980, but there was an increase
to 14% at
1985 and Change preposition
in
continue
to grow consistently to reach 64% in 2015. Wrong verb form
continued
However
, this
percentage made they were the highest on
participation of female senior managers by the end of the period.
Change preposition
in
Additionally
, Bamforth
Ltd
showed a slower increase
, starting at 9% in 1975 and rising to 13% in 1985. Then
, they slowly grew to 46% at the end
of period
in 2015. Add an article
the period
a period
On the other hand
, Finsbury
Ltd
showed only a slight improvement, starting at 16% in 1975, the amount fluctuates
slightly but reached only 26% in 2015.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
fluctuated
Eldan
Ltd
and Bamforth
Ltd
had good improvements year-on-year in female participation in senior management, with Eldan
Ltd
leading the trend. However
, Finsbury
Ltd
had slower progress in achieving representation.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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