The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the percentage of women in senior management roles across three companies

Eldan

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Ltd

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Bamforth

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Ltd

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, and

Finsbury

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Ltd

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over a 40-year period from 1975 to 2015.

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, there was a significant

increase

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in the proportion of female senior management positions in

Eldan

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Ltd

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and

Bamforth

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Ltd

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while

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the

increase

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was smaller in

Finsbury

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Ltd

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Eldan

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Ltd

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showed the most dramatic growth over the years. In 1975,

Eldan

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Ltd

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had the lowest participation of them, at just 3%, compared to

Bamforth

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Ltd

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at 9% and

Finsbury

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Ltd

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at 16%.

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percentage showed no significant change in 1980, but there was an

increase

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to 14%

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1985 and

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to grow consistently to reach 64% in 2015.

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this

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percentage made they were the highest

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participation of female senior managers by the end of the period.

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Bamforth

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Ltd

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showed a slower

increase

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, starting at 9% in 1975 and rising to 13% in 1985.

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, they slowly grew to 46%

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period

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in 2015.

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Finsbury

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Ltd

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showed only a slight improvement, starting at 16% in 1975, the amount

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slightly but reached only 26% in 2015. In conclusion,

Eldan

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Ltd

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and

Bamforth

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Ltd

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had good improvements year-on-year in female participation in senior management, with

Eldan

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Ltd

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leading the trend.

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Finsbury

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Ltd

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had slower progress in achieving representation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words eldan, ltd, bamforth, finsbury, increase with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

227 words

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