These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss tge advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

There is no denying the fact that
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some people decide to move to other
countries
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apply to study or job.
while
it is commonly
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belief that there are many
advantageous
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to doing
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. there is
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an
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that, some people think
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very
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hard.
this
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essay will analyse
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of view and express my opinion. 
One
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one
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hand,
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to work or studying has more features mainly more experience in various fields.
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apply
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to work in
new
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a new
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countries
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,
this
experience could
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new things
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as
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new relationships and country culture.
In addition
, when you
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to
living
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on
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new
countries
this
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on yourself alone.
for example
, I remember that
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the first time I
traveled
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in
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united states
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United States
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was hard for me, because when I lived with my family my parents helped me
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everything's ,
however
, now I can do
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alone without any
helping
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.
On the other hand
, some people take advantage of travel in a bad way. it is
also
possible to say that, they
has
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negative
behaviors
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or they want
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bad things
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as
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alcohol and drugs which results in addiction.
Moreover
, being away from home for a long time can cause homesickness because they can not live for a long time alone.
for instance
, some researchers said that, if the human sits alone for months and years, he will develop mental and psychological illnesses . In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
question. on balance,
However
, I tend to believe that,
apply
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for
jop
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job
jobs
or
study's
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studying
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on
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other
countries
has more opportunities and benefits.
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