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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The pie graphs compare the percentages of British students who speak
other
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another language
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language
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in addition
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 to English at university in England between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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 it can be seen that in both years the
language
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 of Spanish was the most popular spoken by students
whereas
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, others
language
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less
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were less
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 preferred in 2010.
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with
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 in 2000 the largest sector was
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the Spanish
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language
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comprised
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 30%
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then
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 in 2010 it witnessed
increase
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an increase
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on
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 5%.
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no other
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 was at 20% in 2000 and
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decline
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declined
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 to ten
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one in 2010.
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Moreover
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 another
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 was a quarter in 2000 and
then
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 rose
at
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to
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 20% in 2010. The most interesting
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that
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is that
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German
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the German
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 was the same percentage in both years formed at only 10%.
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Also
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 it is important to notice that
French
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the French
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 was 15% in 2000 and in 2010 no one
spoken
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spoke
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this
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic abilities
  • speakers
  • trends
  • popularity
  • globalization
  • educational policy
  • significant statistics
  • dramatic increase/decline
  • language learning
  • non-European languages
  • decade
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