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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart illustrates
about
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the
amount
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 of minutes
peole
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people
 spent on
telephone
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the telephone
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, divided into three types in the UK in the period from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, it is crystal clear that individuals mostly preferred calls on
telephone
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 rather than talking on mobiles. On the one hand, we observe that local calls recorded with 70 billion minutes in 1995 witnessed a steady increase
by
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 18
billions
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 until reached their peak in 1999 at 90 billion minutes before
returing
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returning
retiring
at
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 the same number in 2002 at 73
billions
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.
On the other hand
, both the national and international calls started from 35
billions
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 and faced a gradual rise by reaching
at
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50
billions
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billion
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 in the
last
 years.
However
, mobile calls
was
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 the least favoured ones in the initial years but reached
at
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40
billions
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 in the end.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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