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The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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A glance at the diagram provided illustrates
regarding
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the manufacturing of leather products like shoes and bags.
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, it is crystal clear that it
contain
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 eleven steps in total, starting with the collection of animal skin and
ends
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 in the factories where
final
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the final
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 thing
in
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is
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 ready to send to the consumers.
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 with, the drying of animal skin which
later
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 transported
into
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factory
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the factory
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 via trucks.
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,
skin
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the skin
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get
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 washed in the mixture of lime and water,
afterwards
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and afterwards
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, preparing
it
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to be flattened with the help of
roller
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a roller
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, it first
get
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 soaked in lime. After flattening, it is again soaked into
tanin
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tannin
 which is a combination of water and vegetable matter.
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, it is now ready for getting
load
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 into the lorries after polishing the product and in the
factories
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factories,
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 it is shaped into the daily consumption goods.
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