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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The pie charts
provides
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 information about the percentages of the
Uk
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UK
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 who study at one university in England
as well as
 they can
to
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apply
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speak different
languages
 plus they speak native
language
 in one decade .
Overall
, the charts
illustrates
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 six types of
languages
with
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in
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 two
period
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 from 2000 to 2010 , it can be clearly seen that the majority of
student
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students
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 talks just one
language
while
, the least common
language
 was
Germany
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German
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. In general, in 2000 the students of British
the
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unable
speak
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to speak
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other
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another
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language
 was over
quarter
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 per cent
in contrast
 in 2010
has
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been
rised
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risen
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 to 35 per cent . The second proportion of
languages
were
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was
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 French and another
language
 in 2000 which
they
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apply
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were 15% and 15% respectively,
however
, in 2010 the proportion of French only
growth
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 to reach 20 per cent
likewise
another
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another language
other languages
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languages
 declined to reach 10 %
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic abilities
  • speakers
  • trends
  • popularity
  • globalization
  • educational policy
  • significant statistics
  • dramatic increase/decline
  • language learning
  • non-European languages
  • decade
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