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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of British
students
 at a university in England who could speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the six categories showed different trends over the time period.
However
, it is evident that Spanish remained the most spoken additional language in both years,
while
 the proportions of
students
 speaking two other languages and German were the lowest throughout the period. In 2000, the percentage of
students
 who spoke Spanish was 30%, which increased slightly to 35% in 2010.
Similarly
, the percentage of
students
 speaking another language rose from 15% to 20% over the decade.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
students
 speaking French decreased from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.
By contrast
, the proportion of
students
 speaking German remained unchanged at 10% in both years. In conclusion,
while
 Spanish and other languages gained popularity, the percentage of
students
 speaking French declined, and German remained stable during the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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