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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British poeple giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart above illustrates information on the percentage of British
people
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 who are donating their
money
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 to charity from various
age
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group
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groups
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 between the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
people
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 from
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age
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the age
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 range 18
until
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to
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 50
was
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were
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 dominating in 1990.
However
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, in 2010, the
age
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 group from 51 and 65 years above are the ones who are dominating.
To begin
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 with, in 1990, there were as
much
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many
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 as 15 per
cent
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 from
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age
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the age
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 group 18 to 25 who
donates
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donated
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 their
money
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.
Then
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, the number significantly increased from other
age
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 groups, which was 26 to 35. Following that,
reach
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reached
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the
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a
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 peak
around
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of around
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 42 per
cent
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. After that, the total of
donation
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donations
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continuosly
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continuously
 decreased
along with
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 older
people
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, respectively 35 per
cent
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 and 32 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2010,
people
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 who
categorized
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were categorized
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 as young generations, especially
from
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those from
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 18 until 25,
giving
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gave
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 their
money
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 only about 6 per
cent
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.
Nonetheless
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, adults are donating more
for
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apply
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around 24 per
cent
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.
Subsequently
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,
people
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 between
ages
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the ages
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36
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of 36
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 and 65 are constantly upwards to give their
money
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for
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to
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 charity. Afterwards, the number lower to 35 per
cent
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 following
older
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the older
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 generation.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, age, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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