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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
cahrts
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charts
chart
 illustrate the
amount
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number
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 of
women
 and
men
 in someone Asian
contry
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country
 who passed
theirs
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their
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 driving
test
 from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the
precentage
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percentage
 of driving tests
pssed
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passed
 by
men
were
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was
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 growing every ten years. Despite
this
, the
precentage
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percentage
 of
women
 who passed the driving
test
were
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was
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 slightly
hight
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higher
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 than
men
. The
women
 who successfully passed the driving
test
 in 1980 were just under 50
precentages
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per cent
,
that
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which
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 was the lowest
figures
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figure
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of
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for
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women
 in 30 years. After a
slightly
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slight
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 rise in 1990, there was
increase
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an increase
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 to the
hight
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height
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 point of a little bit less than 70
precentages
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per cent
 in 2000, before a
little
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small
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 decline to slightly more than 60
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per cent
 in 2010. In 1980,
men
's driving tests were passed by only under 30
precenatges
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percentages
percentage
,
then
 in
1990
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1990,
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 the indicator
growed
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grew
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 up to just under 40
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 and eventually the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of
men
rised
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rose
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 to the
hight
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high
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 point
around
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of around
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 50
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 in 2000 and 2010 without any
chenges
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changes
. 1980 was the only year when
men
pessed
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passed
driving
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the driving
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test
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tests
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on
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apply
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under 30%
that
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which
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 was the lowest
precentages
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percentages
percentage
of
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in
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 50 years.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, test, precentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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