The pie charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak additional languages besides English, in 2000 and 2010.
The pie graphs
presents
the distribution of foreign Change the verb form
present
language
ability among British students
from university
in England, Fix the agreement mistake
universities
during
2000 and 2010.
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between
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from 2000 to 2010, proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
students
who only can speak english
demonstrates Change the capitalization
English
the
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a
shrink
trend, Change the verb form
shrinking
althoug
it Correct your spelling
although
had decrease
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has a decreasing
whereas
the largest proportion. Noticeable
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Noticeably
proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
students
who can speak more than one language
outlines the significantly
growth.
In more detail, the percentage of Change the adverb
significant
students
who only know english
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English
decrease
from 65% in 200 to 50% in 2010, shrink down 15% in total. Wrong verb form
decreased
In contrast
, who
can speak more than three languages Correct pronoun usage
those who
increase
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increased
1
% in total, Change preposition
by 1
while
the percentage of can speak two additional languages and one additional language
are increase
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increased
4
% and 10% in total, respectively.
In conclusion, all the information was clear and easy to compareChange preposition
by 4
them
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apply
while
shows
that Wrong verb form
showing
students
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students'
student's
language
ability shows strongly
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strong
improvment
.Correct your spelling
improvement
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