The bar chart shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided graph depicts
infomation
about the world - wided digital Correct your spelling
information
games
sales consists
of Mobile phone Wrong verb form
consisting
games
, Online games
, Console Games
, and of
Handheld Change preposition
apply
games
between 2000 and 2006 by billions of dollars.
Overall
, handheld games
sales incresed
as the same as online Correct your spelling
increased
increase
games
and mobile phone games
which
income surged every yearCorrect word choice
where
given
, Verb problem
apply
whereas
the sales of console games
slightly diped
every Correct your spelling
decreased
years
that Change to a singular noun
year
graph
provided.
Handheld Correct article usage
the graph
games
incomes was
the highest volume Change the verb form
were
compares
to Wrong verb form
compared
others
types of Correct quantifier usage
other
games
given aproximately
12 Correct your spelling
approximately
billions
dollars and above.Change to singular
billion
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