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The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table highlights the data about the volume of energy in
calories
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 from 1970 to 2010 in the United States of America.
Overall
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, the total amount increased by the
consuming
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consumption
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 growth of every type of food. The most consumable meal was grains, meat, nuts and added fat,
while
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 the
last
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 one was fruit and vegetables. As can be seen in the table, the total number expanded from 2165 to 2665. The biggest source of
calories
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 went from nuts and animal products except milk. Their volume got larger from 465 to 480.
However
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, people started to be interested in added fat and grain in 2010.
That is
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 why the highest average belonged to them with 625 and 640
calories
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 in 2010.
Furthermore
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, the lowest place was taken by healthy food. The interest
of
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in
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 dairy products and vegetables decreased by 10 and 5, respectively.
On the other hand
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,
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calories
Correct article usage
the calories
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 of fruits increased by 15.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words calories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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