The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

The charts below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000
The bar charts illustrate the proportion of employed men and
women
who were 60 to 64 years old in four
countries
including
Belgium
, the
USA
,
Japan
, and
Australia
in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, what stands out from these figures is that there was a decline in the percentage of working men in all four
countries
. Among these
countries
,
Belgium
witnessed the highest and
Japan
showed the least
rate
whereas
there was a rise in the
USA
and
Australia
in terms of
women
and the rest of
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reduced. Regarding Males, in 1970,
Japan
had the highest proportion of working males, which declined from 85% to 74% and remained at the top in 2000.
However
, the
rate
in
Belgium
decreased to 19% in 2000 from 79% in 1970.
Then
, the
USA
and
Australia
also
experienced a sharp decline in the
rate
of adult employment from 73% and 76% to 55% and 47%, respectively. Regarding
women
, the
USA
had a larger increase in
women
's employment in 1970, which was 36%,
then
rose to 39%.
Moreover
, there was a rise of 2% in
Australia
from 16% to 18% in 2000.
Nevertheless
,
Belgium
and
Japan
witnessed a decrease which was from 8% and 43% to 40%. Even though witnessing a drop,
Japan
stood top country among these in terms of aged
women
employment.
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