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The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of British individuals giving money to charity by
age
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 range in
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years
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the years
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 1990 and 2010. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
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, it can be seen that individuals who
has
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have
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age
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an age
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 range between 36 and 50
years
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 in 1990 spent
highest
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the most
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 money
to
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on
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 charity. Looking first at people
has
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apply
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age
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aged
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 18-25, 26-35, and 36-50 for the
years
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 1990 and 2010. The figures for 18-25
years
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 decreased dramatically from approximately 17% to around 7%. At the same time, the proportion of 26-35
years
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 declined noticeably by above 30% to under 25%. Meanwhile, there was
a
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an
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 exponential drop in
age
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 36-40
years
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 from about 43% to 35%. Moving on to the percentage of British individuals by
age
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 51-60 and less than 65. In 1990, British people
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age
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aged
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 between 51 and 60 stood at 35% and
then
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 jumped to just under 40% in 2010.
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,
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 people who
younger
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were younger
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 than 65
years
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 began at above 30% before increasing gradually to 35% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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