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The tables above show sales of fair trade coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004

The tables above show sales of fair trade coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004
The table graphs illustrate sales of trade both coffee and bananas in five different countries in Europe in the years 1999 and 2004.
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, the UK dominated
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the chart within the given period, except
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,
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Sweden
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 was the smallest part of the category in 1999. Coffee sales in Britain rose significantly to 20
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 in 2004 from 1.5
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 in 1999,
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Sweden
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 experienced a tiny growth to 1
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 in 2004 from 0.8
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 in 1997.
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, Switzerland was
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 one with 3
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 in 1999 for selling coffee and reached 6
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 in 2004,
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 Denmark stood
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 the second
leader
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 country in
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 category with 1.8
million
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euros
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 in the first period,
then
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 it increased to 2
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. Regarding banana sales, the most considerable increase
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 in the UK, 15
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 in 1999 and 47
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 in 2004.
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, Switzerland showed
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 change in
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 term; it rose to 5.5
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 in 2004 from 1
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 in 1999,
while
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 Denmark went up to 4
million
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 in 2004 from 0.6
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 in 1999.
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 Belgium and
Sweden
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 leveled out
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 and 2
million
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 in 1999 respectively. Neither Belgium nor
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rise
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, both Belgium and
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 declined to 1 and 0.9
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 till 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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