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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #job #employers #value #work
Some people think the best way to secure a good
job
 is by getting a
degree
 from
university
. In another perspective,
work
experience
 is more valued rather than a
university
degree
. To secure a good
job
,
university
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a university
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degree
 and
work
experience
 are very important. Getting a
degree
 from
university
Add an article
a university
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 is very important to securing a good
job
. Having a
degree
 means, we are
officialy
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officially
 stated that
mastering
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master
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 something by
the
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apply
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theory or practical and because of that reason
university
degree
viewed
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is viewed
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one
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as one
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 of
most
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the most
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 legitimate
aspect
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aspects
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on
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of
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job
 seeking. Nowadays, most
of
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apply
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job
 vacancy requirements always
stated
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state
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about
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apply
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the minimum level of
degree
 for candidates to apply. Having
a
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apply
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work
experience
 is
also
 the most considerate
things
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thing
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 for employers on selecting
the
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a
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candidate
. Experiencing on working means, the
candidate
 already
understand
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understands
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 the pace and situation of the
job
. By the time the employee
facing
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faces
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 something on working their
jobdesk
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job desk
,
experience
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the experience
show examples
 would help a lot for them because they already understand the problem and how
overcome
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to overcome
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 it. In my opinion, getting a
degree
 from
university
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a university
show examples
 and having
work
experience
 are the best and
legitimate
Correct quantifier usage
most legitimate
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 things for
candidate
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a candidate
the candidate
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on securing
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to secure
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 a good
job
. If the
candidate
have
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has
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an
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a
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 combination
between
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apply
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of these two things, it would be a great strength for them
on applying
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to apply
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 and
being
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be
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 more valued by the employers.
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relevant specific examples
Work on integrating examples that clearly illustrate your point, such as successful professionals who benefited from both education and experience.
clear comprehensive ideas
Clarify your ideas further by expanding on why each element (degree and work experience) is important and how they complement each other.
introduction conclusion present
You successfully introduce both views and provide your opinion effectively in your essay.
logical structure
The basic structure of your essay is logical, with paragraphs dedicated to each viewpoint.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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