The bar chart below shows the percentages of children from four countries taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentages of children from four countries taking part in four kinds of activities in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
provide
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key information about
compare
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the participation rate of children in the activities
each
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of
four
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the four
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countries
. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Nigeria has the highest level of computer games.
In addition
, Malaysia and Sudan
were
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have similar
to
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percentage
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.
Whereas
Nigeria and Sudan
were have
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minimal
of
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reading.
According to
what is shown, all
countries
were have
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same
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level of watching TV ,
reading
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activity rate of
four
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countries
was minor. The graph showed that 25% of board
games
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was
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participants rate in Malaysia and China. In terms of computer games activity was most popular
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countries
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • activity
  • comparison
  • trends
  • cultural preferences
  • notable differences
  • popular
  • least popular
  • indoor activities
  • outdoor activities
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