The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts present the proportion of
time
an employed adult spent on various tasks.
This
includes data from 1958 to 2008.
Overall
, working adults spent the highest percentage of their
time
working.
However
, in 1958, the lowest proportion was allotted to travelling to
work
and in 2008 it was going out with family or friends. In detail, in 1958, 33% of the
time
of employed adults was spent working and
this
was followed by an adjacent 32% of their
time
sleeping.
Also
, a ratio of 19% of the
time
of working adults was done by going out with friends or family.
Moreover
, less than 10% of their
time
was allotted to relaxing at home at 8% which was four times lower than the amount of
time
working.
Furthermore
, they spent 6% of their
time
doing other interests or playing sports, and
lastly
, the lowest proportion which was thrice lower than doing sports was travelling to
work
with only 2%.
Similarly
, after 50 years, adult employees still spend 42% of their
time
at
work
.
This
was again followed by sleeping with a quarter percentage. In comparison,
this
year,
instead
of going out with their families, 13% of their
time
was to relax at home. Equally, they spent their
time
doing other interests or playing sports and travelling to
work
at 8%.
Finally
, the least
time
spent in 2008 was with their family or friends with only 6%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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