Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals. What are the advantages to this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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chemicals
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disadvantages.
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threat
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chemicals
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words
foods
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ready-meals
make addict to our bodies
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ready meals
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foods
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increadble
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dopamine
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more happy
, or else you feel more stress and anxiety.
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happier
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long time. Correct article usage
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that processed
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harmfull
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