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The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart provides information regarding 4 different
type
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types
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 of
purchuses
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purchases
purchase
includes
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including
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 manufacturing,
constraction
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construction
, retail and communication
where
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which
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 businesses made in
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 industry between 2015 and 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen that the amount of money spent on
industry
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the industry
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 has significantly increased
through out
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throughout
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 years.
Manufacturing
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The manufacturing
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 process jumped from 30% to 50% within a year
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apply
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while
, it
has
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apply
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slightly
droped
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dropped
 in 2017 followed by growth to more than 50% in 2019. Information and Communication had the highest money
cunsumption
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consumption
 during
this
 period where there was 60% in 2015 and gradually increased to more than 70% in 2019. In conclusion, it is obvious that the Canadian companies made a huge investment in all
compartment
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compartments
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 of industrial businesses.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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