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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the share of
water
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 used for industrial, agricultural and domestic for six parts of the world.
Overall
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,
water
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 is used more for agriculture except in
Europe
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 and North
America
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 which is used more for industry.
Also
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, the
second
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 usage of
water
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 is domestic in South
America
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, Africa, and Central
Asia
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.
Although
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 industrial use is the
second
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 in South East
Asia
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. It is evident that the most usage of
water
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 is for agriculture except in
Europe
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 and North
America
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.
Additionally
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, the
water
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 used for agriculture in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 is significantly more than the other uses. It is clearly seen that industrial is used more
water
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 in
Europe
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 and North
America
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 which are 53 and 48 per cent, respectively.
Moreover
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, industrial is used
water
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 in the
second
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 rank in South East
Asia
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 which is 12 per cent.
However
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, the
second
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 in
Europe
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 and North
America
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 is for agricultural use.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, europe, america, second, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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