The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates information regarding the ratio of purchases including manufacturing, construction, wholesale and retail made by different Canadian businesses between 2015 and 2019.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear that
although
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every sector was growing at its pace, no one was declining except Information and communications.
To begin
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with, the wholesale industry faced a continuous increase from 20% to 55% in its
last
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year.
Similarly
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, construction had witnessed the same trend as wholesale but it followed a gradual increase. Interestingly, communication was the only area with the highest percentage even after facing numerous ups and downs, it remained at the top and hovered between 60% and 75%.
However
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, the manufacturing sector was the one with the highest number of fluctuations over the period starting from 30% in 2015 and after facing the incline of 20%, it reached 40% in 2017. Talking about retail, it surged from 30% to 50% in only one year,
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, it ranged between 50% and 60% afterwards.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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