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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

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The given chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of people
ate
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who ate
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 fruits and vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that children, men and women experienced an upward trend over the next 7 years. In detail, the percentage of women
ate
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who ate
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 fruits and vegetables
23
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was 23
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% in 2001, and increased gradually to 30% in 2005.The figure rich to 35% which was the highest percentage in
this
 chart.
Then
 the proportion decreased slightly to 2008 in the final year.In
case
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the case
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 of men, started at 17%, and maintained over the next 3 years.After that, the figure climbed significantly to 27% from 2003 to 2006, and
fall
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fell
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 merely to 26% in 2008. Turning to the figure for children started at 13%, and maintained the same level between 2001 and 2003.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, the proportion
rise
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rose
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 dramatically to 26% in 2007
,
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apply
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 and dropped
markly
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markedly
 to 24% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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